Sumi H. Inkblot

:*snort*: I want to know what's so shocking about [spoiler]someone becoming pregnant. It's probably the most natural thing in the world... (Unless it's the man-pregnant thing that was jumping around ...

o.O Ahem. Sorry I'm late, you've really got to give some indication in the title. "Elemental Dragons Chapter 2" or "Part 2" or "#2" or something. I completely thought this ...

Helloo, Tatra! I like what you've got going here. It's an excellent beginning to a story, but I'd like to point out a few things. Asia -- Like, the continent? ...

Heya, Echo! You get a line-by-line. Aren't you lucky? :P The heartbeats in his head drown out the laughter, and delighted squeals of the other children on the playground...their merry ...

Everyone is saying that it is such a great book (beautiful being the most used adjective) but really, what is the book about (for all the ignoramuses like me out ...

Hey Whisperer! What you've got so far looks very promising, but I'd like to point out a few things before I get to the grammar. -- A roan is actually ...

Lol. My guilty pleasure. >.< It's kind of casual and dumb at the same time, but Clare's writing style and the crazy humor kept me reading. She's not that great ...

Look at this! Click here! It's another 'spoiler'. I mean, just look at him! Scroll down to the video, and watch it. It is so cheap, he really thinks he ...

I...wow. :shock: That's pretty amazing! It's a beautiful poem, Charliebo, and one you should definitely be proud of. The rhythm falls out here.... Each face, scarred, muddied or pristine Is ...

Hello, Luna! Firstly, I'd like to suggest you take this test in regard to your OCs, and then consider if you seriously want to continue the story based on your ...

I'd like to revisit what Vernon said. You're trying to fit Texas into Rhode Island and it's not working. This madness has gone too far, blackened and dead with fear. ...

Hello, teenweirdo! An interesting piece you've got here. I especially like the repetition of "bottle"-- gives it a nice flavor. The only other thing I feel the need to point ...

Hello, black star! --This is navel-gazing and, to use a harsher term, emo. Most lines have a reference to you (I, my, me, et cetera) and how pathetic you are. ...

Hello, Tag! Oooh, this looks interesting! I only have a few things to point out: Pacing, pacing, always pacing. Professor Carmen itched at his beared, nose scrunched with a childish ...

Serene-Angel: Please critique at least two other pieces before posting your own! It's in the YWS rules. Space this up, break it into 1,000-2,000 word pieces and then post. Any ...